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Comments for 'Threatened-pt 1'



Javier Fernandez-Vina
7:01 pm | October 18, 2003
cough*microsoft word*cough
ONI_operative_343
5:11 pm | October 18, 2003
try to edit a bit more, eh? u use a lot of words wrong (ex: u used shore, like the ocean, instead of sure)

stay out of puddles...
UNSC_spec._117
1:33 am | October 18, 2003
Does it have to be around 2000 if so thats ok ill try it for next time thanks 4 the advice.
Javier Fernandez-Vina
10:53 pm | October 17, 2003
I like your story, even though its short.2000 words please.And i'd like to know what name you will give to that new covie.
Now go read my story soldier its called angels war id like a comment, or two ,OR THREE.
Alpha Lance
8:20 pm | October 17, 2003
Well, 2000 words is no promblem for.
Alpha Lance
8:18 pm | October 17, 2003
It was good, just spend more time on it and make it a longer story-maybe 2000 words, which is no prblem- and it will be gold.
UNSC_spec._117
1:08 pm | October 17, 2003
thanx oni hope o injoy the others as well!!
ONI_operative_343
9:39 am | October 17, 2003
oh yeah! first comment! go ONI!

ok down to buisness- nice story. keep em goin.

CONGRATS ON YOUR FIRST STORY!!!


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