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Comments for 'Assualt of Plaza 13'



hornet34
5:47 am | September 8, 2003
Hmm, I would have liked a little more setup before the fighting began, such as time of day, reason for the patrol, and brief description of the area. But, the grammar was good, the story realistic, and the characters real, which puts it leagues ahead of most of the crap that gets posted here. Keep up the good work, and a little description of the main grunt character would be nice. 9.1/10
'Nosolee
1:30 pm | September 7, 2003
awesome, really good
Mainevent
3:38 am | September 7, 2003
Anytime I can help Scribe. I always try to help fellow writers.
Lord Revan
10:28 pm | September 6, 2003
Nice. Your series is great. Keep up the good work.
To: The Mainevent From: The Scribe
7:35 pm | September 6, 2003
Thank you, Mainevent. And I'm not being sarcastic. Those are the kind of comments that I use in future writing. Thank you.
Mainevent
7:30 pm | September 6, 2003
Comments are few and far between.

It was okay. I didn't really feel the Gergep thing, he just lacked something. Soon to be his head I guess, but anywhoo. If you do make him a main character, give him more emotion.

Otherwise good job.
FOrunnER
6:11 pm | September 6, 2003
Good story. I think this is one of the longest series I've read. 9/10
The Scribe
6:11 pm | September 6, 2003
I just kept putting this off, but I finally finished it.
The Scribe
6:11 pm | September 6, 2003
Why the hell arent the comments showing up?


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