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Comments for 'Fight or flight: Chapter Three'



BlackGhost
4:09 am | December 2, 2003
Good. I like it. But I think you're jumping around to much from person to person. But overall it was an excellent story.
teemus
12:53 pm | December 1, 2003
yup ill try to improve on the sentences and stuff. Im not much of a gramer person.
CoLd BlooDed
7:45 pm | November 30, 2003
Neat idea, you're going to have to start using the code though. You have a few run on sentences and fragments, a few grammar problems as well but you can probably improve on that easily. 7/10
Hawk7886
2:35 am | November 30, 2003
Cool.

9/10


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