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Comments for 'Taking Halo: Chapter Two, A Clash of Heavans'



Steele
10:51 am | May 1, 2003
Yeah, I have on clue how I missed that in the title...
James Kinsella
7:14 pm | April 30, 2003
Just realized, you spelled Heaven wrong. Just a thought...
Steele
2:45 pm | April 30, 2003
No, it's the trick of getting it close to the top.
John Morris
10:08 pm | April 27, 2003
The names flashy enough,I get the same crap, not enough replies, I think what is nessisary is to write an abnormally good piece, get them hooked at the start of the series, and draw to the crowd,
Steele
7:37 pm | April 27, 2003
It's so dreary when only a few people read your stories. I should think of some flashier names.
Steele
12:03 am | April 27, 2003
Nah, I know an 8/10 is good. It's just that I was wondering what the few flaws were so I could correct them.
John Morris
3:29 pm | April 26, 2003
Very much so, I have read your series on here, and there all good. don't get me wrong, I do, review harshly. So a 8/10 is real good, and your piece was.
anonymous
11:26 am | April 26, 2003
most excellent.Am I right in saying that you take alot of inspiration from the Star Wars: X-wing series?
Steele
12:57 am | April 26, 2003
Thankyou. To anonymous: I don't really take ALOT of inspiration from the X-Wing series, but the series did help me out alot when it came down to writing combat.
Steele
12:57 am | April 26, 2003
Hey JMorris, I'm just curious, besides grammar (I may have made a few mistakes) what was flawed with my story. Just curious, I know it wasn't perfect, but I'd like to know what you thought was flawed.
John Morris
10:39 pm | April 25, 2003
Nice work, yet you still I wouldn't give it a perfect 10/10, 8/10, don't get me wrong though, it was an excellent piece, however as few flaws held it back keep up the good work
James Kinsella
9:43 pm | April 25, 2003
Wow, once again Steele has put an incredible amount of work into a brilliant piece. I thought that it was incredible. The story had just enough of the battle mixed with the emotions of those in the story, and it all melded together into a beautiful piece of script. Keep it up!
Steele
7:37 pm | April 25, 2003
Please read and enjoy!


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