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Comments for 'Plasma Burns and Bullet Shells- chapter 8(finale)'



Diamond Dog
11:06 pm | November 6, 2003
Great combat, except I was having trouble seeing the whole picture. To make it better, try describing the battle as if seeing it from a birds eye view, or at least so you can get a sense of everything that's happening, instead of one specific part.

good job though.
Mainevent
12:35 pm | November 6, 2003
Great story Myth. And a wonderful ending to a beautiful series.

I'm gonna try somethin:



I'll try to help you out here so you can make your next one better.

In the futre, a great warrior was born,
Built to kill, with no room to mourn.
scope
11:14 pm | November 4, 2003
9/10 Bravo. Good series


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