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Comments for 'Relations Chapter 1 - Forerunners' |
el_halo_diablo
2:36 am | September 18, 2002
nice to see you on HBO Icebreaker!
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Wado
5:49 pm | September 16, 2002
*NONE-essential, maybe NON-essential would make more sense...lol
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Wado
5:38 pm | September 16, 2002
The story was okay. I probably would say the story was excellent but I had some problem understanding the dialogs between characters. I don't think using italics for Cortana's words is that great an idea. Whenever you use bold or italics in a story it will draw the reader's focus. The italics in this story was everywhere so what it did was make the story look really busy.
Just a suggestion, try to avoid using italics so much. Readers tend to ignore large blocks of italics (it is harder for the mind to process). That's why italics is usually used for none-essential parts such as poems or songs in the middle of a story, slang words, or notes from the author, etc.Good luck in school and hopefully you will find some time to write more.
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