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Comments for 'Training day'



Blue Phoenix
11:24 am | June 7, 2003
You need to work on your grammar and punctuation.
Sarge
3:23 am | May 31, 2003
Um minimum age to join the Marines is 17... but you have to go to high school...

17 with parental consent
pj-NYkr90
6:48 pm | May 30, 2003
good idea. Too many spaces. Bad punctuation at parts. Confusing. Keep tryin'.
Havok
3:39 pm | May 25, 2003
i thought it was a good idea, but the writing threw me off. but dont stop trying.
scope
8:00 pm | May 24, 2003
6.5/10 Well Kimball hit it on the spot...what did u get in ur L.A class. On a higher note u do have room for improvment
Wiley Kimball
7:48 pm | May 22, 2003
Clumsy dialoug, bad spacing, sort of a boring concept. Also, [indent]
7.25/10


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