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Comments for 'Earth's Last Hope - Chapters 1&2'



Raptor
12:02 pm | February 26, 2004
Out some bigger words in and describe the situation more often with much, much more detail..
Dark_Elite
11:24 am | August 7, 2002
Bad new! Currently I have out grown halo but once I gain the intrest back, I will start writing the next. SORRY!!
Dark_Elite
4:24 am | July 19, 2002
I'm currently on vacation and I can't get to a computer easily so please be patient about the next chapters. Sorry!
Flamethrower89
8:15 pm | July 7, 2002
Nice.
Black_Jackal
4:21 pm | June 23, 2002
Excellent Start, but next chapter, don't make it feel so.....rushed. I felt like I was being forced along while I was reading. Also, remember to put in commas. If you have no commas, the story feels rushed and it makes it sound like every is talking incredibly fast. Just my thoughts...
Sarge
1:21 am | June 21, 2002
Its a decent story I actually read the feedback before reading this one I was afraid it was going to be like your other story but this one is better keep it up.
Archangels Blade
11:27 am | June 19, 2002
It's all good. Just don't claim accountability for that horrible, horrible Spartan 5 Project anymore. It's pretty bad to hear someone insulting themselves over a lost cause.
Dark_Elite
8:11 am | June 17, 2002
I'll be waiting for a few more before writing the next one
Anonymous
12:00 am | June 14, 2002
marine1249:16am June 12 2002NIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIICE!Keep it up
Archangels Blade
11:26 am | June 13, 2002
not bad, but the grammar is a little off. That's pretty much the only thing that really needs improvement. Other than that, it's good. Keep it up!
fuck you
2:20 am | June 12, 2002
fucl you
me
3:25 am | June 11, 2002
WOuld they not initiate cole protocol.


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