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Comments for 'Outlaw Chapter 2, MedEvac And Avenging The Fallen'



Kyle
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
Well then...














MAKE ANOTHER COMEDY SERIES!!!!!!
el_halo_diablo
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
many people thought it was a good time for me to end MAOMC Kyle, so I'm sorry, but NO MORE MAOMC!!! Oh but i did write a comedy for my friends web site that should be set up in the week! It's a little immature though...
Sarge
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
I don't write I Just harp on other people about their stuff.
kyle
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
I agree with vero. Diablo has to stay. If he quits, then wado will take his place as the best fan-fic writer. And I'm not kidding about "The new mis-adventures of master chief", I really enjoyed the first ones. So, how about it? C'mon! C'mon! Well? WELL!? COME ON ALREADY! *vaporizes diablo with secret unknown power*
^__^
Vero
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
Hey guys, its me i am back! Kind of. El_Halo_Diablo.....YOU CANNOT NOT QUIT WRITING!!!!!Start up another comedy series or something to keep yourself coming back. You and wado are the only veterens that are still here, at least that i have seen. So keep up your sriting and you too Wado! And when did shadow quit, i thought he was taking part in that combined series???? Oh well, write back everyone!!!1
Sarge
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
As best he meant your one of the only ones who post.

Its you Wado and then a different n00be each week. I'd update but I just expereinced a huge tragedy. I just smashed a soda can too.

el_halo_diablo
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
I don't want to quit as a sucky author that has tried everything possible, and has worn out his "talent"! :)
Kyle
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
YOU BETTER NOT QUIT!!! SERIOUSLY!!!
el_halo_diablo
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
thanks but I seriously think I was never the best. I've always thought Wado was :D.
ThreadedAce3
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
good story, but diablo, now that shadow kinda left, and you leave, who will take you spot as the top fan fic writer??
Wado
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
Well I hope Wing of Death is going to be like 1000 parts long then.
el_halo_diablo
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
Well, nobody will read this so...I think I'll be officially "retiring" from writing fan fics after "Wings of Death", then I will do a final encore fan fic, and then leave forever...
Sarge
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
It took me four tries.
Wado
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
As I recall, you get seven tries before you can give up. Keep writing. ;)
Anonymous
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
ALL NEWBIES GIVE UP BEFORE THEIR NEXT STORY!! WHY WON'T YOU???? I HATE YOU FOR THAT!!!!!!!!!!
Wado
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
* Sorry about all the typos in my comment, it's late. Keep up the writing.
Wado
12:01 am | November 30, -0001
Not bad, the writing has a nice flow to it, mainly I enjoyed the coversations. The uneventful trip to the Armory was a bit of a disappointment.

One big suggestion, when something unusual happens, please take a little more time explaining that it is unusual. Here is what I mean:

125 pounds and 6'4" is tall, but that is very thin for an adult human of that statue. Even snipers have to carry heavy equipment. Is that a typo, did you mean 225 pounds?

The group needs to get to the Armory, but the personal locker they break into has explosives and a rocket launcher in it, etc. Isn't this a bit unusual? I hope it was meant to be because you needs the Armory if every one has a locker like that. I think you probably mean that the guy is really hard core and is allowed to keep a mini-armory in his own locker. That is cool, tells me more about the character. It might have been nice to have a comment by a Marine saying, "Wow, look at that cache, with those weapons we are sure going to kick some butt."

Well keep up the writing.



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