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Comments for 'Halo: The Battle Within. Chapter 2'



Jon M
6:31 am | March 3, 2004
Sure we get the picture. This was a nice effort. It was kind of short, but you gotta start somewhere. Helljumper was right when he said, "More detail."
Helljumper
4:30 pm | March 1, 2004
It was good, moved kinda fast and not much detail. I like how u had the LT go off on the MC, cause thats how marines actually feel. Now don't mess up my Helljumpers or i'll be upset

ODST
First to rise, last to fall
Helljumpers do it all
Feet first into Hell
B-Man
1:21 am | March 1, 2004
Oh, sorry dude...I'm color blind...and I was trying to find it in the books, but I couldn't
MC's Cousin
2:28 pm | February 29, 2004
Well, it was ok. But yes it included the usual spelling and grammarness of newer stories. And one more thing: you might want to fix your television or your eyes. Because unless that was some mutated Grunt or something, it shoudl have been spouting phosphorescent BLUE blood. Not purple.

Signing Off


MCC
B-Man
2:46 pm | February 28, 2004
Wow, sorry guys, I just notised a few spelling mistakes...my bad, I think you can get the picture though


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