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Comments for 'Ackerson's Betrayal: The Dark Side of Humanity Chapter One: Scratching the surface... With a nuke.'



Phalanx3580
8:15 pm | March 11, 2004
My eyes burn also, I really think that you need to check your grammar a lot more than you have here
ToFu
5:24 pm | March 11, 2004
Opps! Let me correct my LD performance...I gotta say interesting, indeed it is my poor child, indeed it is...
ToFu
5:17 pm | March 11, 2004
Hmmm...I gotta interesting, indeed it is my poor child, indeed it is...
Nick Kang
6:17 pm | March 10, 2004
Jesus Christ, that DOES make your eyes burn. It sounds like a first grader talking on an IM system.
Do us all a favor and try to clean up your writing skill, or don't write at all!
CoLd BlooDed
3:42 pm | March 10, 2004
No, this wasn't good, I counted way too many spelling errors, too many grammatical problems and it also burned my eyes, this prevented from making it a good story.

Try again, please, and put more effort into your stories.
Mastergrunt
2:21 pm | March 10, 2004
EYES BURNING UP!!! CAN'T STAND ANY MORE POOR GRAMMAR!! SELFDESTRUCT IN TEN SECONDS!!! Okay, now that I have recovered from that terrible shock, I have a few things to say. First: wen yu rit lik tis, yu mak a fol out of yorself. Try reading that. Second, Ackerson doesn't act like how you made him act at all. He operates more from behind the scenes with cloak and dagger tricks.


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