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Comments for 'First To Die'



witelancer
6:51 pm | December 1, 2003
not bad, but the story development seemed very unpolished.. that's what revision is for.
But... decent story. A little short, but it's keeping me occupied during lunch, and that's what matters.
-7/10
Sentinel
3:53 am | November 30, 2003
It was good.
BlackValkyire
12:58 pm | November 28, 2003
Ehhh, coulda been better...felt like I needed to write something...w/e...could use some more reviews on Rise and Fall of the Flood...
BlackGhost
7:05 am | November 28, 2003
I keep thinking Lutenant is Luftwaffe. It's spelled lieutenant.
Capo Rip
5:12 am | November 28, 2003
Needed a bit more proof-reading. It's "lieutenant", BTW. And what was Jack's rank? Otherwise, apart from being short, it was good and descriptive.


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