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Comments for 'Achilles Last Stand: (part.1 of 2)'



SOS.Odin
9:39 pm | May 19, 2004
ditchin early is a good idea
unless you have a good idea goin
keep writin
keep tryin
read others
and read the book
ull get good
SeverianofUrth
8:11 pm | May 19, 2004
Oh, that's what was wrong... Damn it. Thanks, Helljumper, for pointing that out. I'm going to ditch this story, soon. no part II.
Helljumper
3:00 pm | May 19, 2004
You need to give people ranks when u introduce a character. I'm assuming Page and plant are officers.

The last part was just confusing I don't know what you were getting at.

ODST


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