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Comments for 'Last Resort - Part 1'



Alpha Lance
6:13 pm | February 22, 2004
My eyes!
CoLd BlooDed
7:47 pm | February 21, 2004
Ouch....
Tank
1:30 pm | February 21, 2004
What they said.
StripeyCat
9:38 pm | February 20, 2004
Great advice. Try reading some great stories like "On a Pale Horse".
IAmDelta
5:53 am | February 20, 2004
Yeah, Hawk covered it. The combination of length and crappy formatting made this one real tough to read. The writing seemed decent, but don't expect praise unless we can get through it first.
Nick Kang
8:57 pm | February 19, 2004
To italicize, [i]word[i/]
To bold-type, [b]word[b/]
To indent, [indent]and then start writing.
blind_snowman
8:33 pm | February 19, 2004
It was a trawl through text to read, like wading through ball bearings.
MC's Cousin
3:00 pm | February 19, 2004
I see I don't have much to explain. Ditto.

Signing Off


MCC
Hawk7886
12:56 pm | February 19, 2004
I started reading, but the migraine I began developing after I reached the fifth line convinced me that it wasn't such a good idea.

Two things you want to do here:

1. Paragraphing With Basic Sentence Structure:

This means that you use full sentences and paragraph utilization. Run-on sentences are bad, people don't like to see two or three of them, let alone five in the same chunk of text.

Paragraphing makes your text less of a block-type-thing, and more of a "Wow! I can read that!"-type thing. New paragraphs start after a heavier train-of-thought changes direction, or after a person finishes talking:

"Hey, Bob!"

"Hi, Bill!"

After you use paragraphing and full sentences, your writing becomes readable. Almost like magic.

2. Proofread!

Master Chief, Shotgun, Covenant, and Assault Rifle.

Errors easily corrected through proofreading help make your story more fun. It no longer becomes a metaphorical hike-through-a-field-of-sharp-pointy-objects.

Spell-checkers also help. Feeding it through a program like Microsoft Word or Corel ensure that nearly all basic errors are brought to attention and that consistency is kept. Proofreading further ensures this.


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