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Comments for 'The Plague Part 3 (Finale)'



monitor101
10:10 pm | October 13, 2003
Bull shit you dumbass. Go fuck your self I was saying your right about the plot in the story. Taking everything so personally? Dude what the fuck are you talking about dumbshit.
Dispraiser
10:41 pm | October 12, 2003
THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT I SAID BEFORE!!! I said that you post a story and one person posts a bad comment, usually someone who has fanfics posted here and someone who is worth trusting. You yell at them, say their point is stupid, ect, and then someone else says it. Another agrees with them, and you appologize again. You need to stop taking everything so personally.
monitor101
8:42 pm | October 12, 2003
Yah I know Forerunner this was a pointless story anyways. Dispraiser your right you have been here a lot longer then I have. Thanks for the comment MasterGrunt! I will continue on with the Mutation the Viruses sequel and hopefully it will do better than this one.
MasterGrunt
8:26 pm | October 12, 2003
I liked the story didn't anyone else?
FOrunnER
3:30 pm | October 12, 2003
Nobody is trying to put you down, just help you with your writing.[friendly advice] Just work on it a little more, or have sombody proofread it. I don't know if your new or not, but in case you are, try reading other stories first, learn there style of writing, then benefiet from it[/friendly advice]
FOrunnER
3:30 pm | October 12, 2003
Okay, I just checked for you and yor obviously NOT a newbie, but what I posted earlier still stands (dude, you've done so much better in other stories)
Dispraiser
3:05 am | October 12, 2003
Yeah, 4/10 is a little low. I think I would give it a 6-7.
monitor101
7:28 pm | October 10, 2003
Jesus what do I do wrong?
monitor101
7:24 pm | October 10, 2003
Oh yah thanks for the fucking morale boost. Hawk your always like that so I won't even bother. Mainevent you could have just said a simple "Could have been a lot better" or "Needs some work" or something like that instead of totally making a sarcastic post. Yah I ment paranoia. And Dispraiser like I said I'm not a suckbaby or whatever so don't even think about using this as an example.
Mainevent
11:18 am | October 10, 2003
The story was kinda IFFY:

Bill: I'm going to make a lateral incicision which I've performed hundreds of times before on this here DEAD monkey. Which is coincidentally infected with the most deadly and destructive virus since the flood.

Jorge:.....So you gonna make the cut or not?

Bill: Here I go..*cutting* everything seems to be going fine, just a litt...damn, I cut myself with this here scalpel which is covered in coagulated blood that is infected with the most deadly and destructive virus since the flood.

Sarah: He's going crazy!! It's insomnia.

Bill: I don't think so...
Hawk7886
11:20 am | October 9, 2003
No no, insomnia fits. Would you be in a good mood if you could never sleep? I know that would frustrate the HELL outta me :)

It also seems kinda wierd how he could cut himself with a knife accidentally. "Now, just carefully work around this artery and everythi-SCHLIT-. . . oops."

Mehhh, the whole story seems kinda sketchy . . .
4/10
Dispraiser
7:37 pm | October 8, 2003
I can't sleep!

Well, I won't post anything bad since that gets revenge posts in my fanfics, but I can't say much good... Bye...
Mainevent
7:10 pm | October 8, 2003
You probably meant paranoia, insomnia is a sleep disorder...


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