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Comments for 'The Virus Part 6'



crashedwarthog
5:47 am | August 30, 2003
dont u know how 2 use bold writing or sumthing???
HunterKiller
12:59 am | August 7, 2003
Cool 9/10
scope
6:32 pm | August 5, 2003
ok
monitor101
5:09 pm | August 5, 2003
Thanks for the comments a lot. Hey see ya later Nosolee can't wait for you to get back and post the next Fall Of Fate! Hey scope yah I didn't have another word for stuff and that was all that I could come up with at the time.
Wiley
6:09 pm | August 4, 2003
Great, 9/10
scope
3:48 pm | August 4, 2003
9.5/10 Awsome! One tiny tinsy weenie thing I saw,

The ceiling was at least 40 feet units and the pillars that supported it were engraved with sculptures of Covenant gods and other stuff.

I know its a little thing but in the HALO books iv read no Elite has said "stuff", maybe you could have said the ceiling was at least 40 feet units and the pillars that supported it were engraved with sculptures of Covenant gods and other objects.

And did you mean the ceiling was 40 feet units high?

Just a little suggestion
Alpha Lance
4:55 am | August 4, 2003
Ass kick'in story!Keep it up.9/10
Steele
1:19 am | August 4, 2003
Yeah, monitor, good story. I will admit, my retinas did hurt after reading the scrunched up block of text, but it was worth it.
apache119
1:03 am | August 4, 2003
great story, see ya 'Nosolee.
'Nosolee
12:14 am | August 4, 2003
Awesome! Your back! 10/10. But I'm gonna be gone for a Week 1/2, so there will be a wait for the next Fall of Fate. Talk to you guys when I get back!
Agent Shade
12:07 am | August 4, 2003
[indent]

space your paragraphs out a bit, allows the story to flow easily

keep writing 9/10
pooman
10:14 pm | August 3, 2003
cool 1/1
monitor101
10:08 pm | August 3, 2003
Thanks for the comments any more!
halo player12
10:08 pm | August 3, 2003
Congrats monitor you have out done yourself. This is a very good story and like Hawk7886 said iit does have high potential I loved it. Very good attention to detail and very well researed I'm sure! I give you kudos keep up the damn brilliant work!
pooman
9:45 pm | August 3, 2003
cool 10/10
Hawk7886
8:13 pm | August 3, 2003
Minor grammatical and capitalizational errors. "covenant weekly" should be "Covenant Weekly" etc. Some spelling errors, commas are missing etc. Overall a great story that has huge potential. 9/10


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