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Comments for 'Halo 2: Chapter One and Chapter Two'



John E
8:51 pm | March 4, 2004
Hey, i know its short, sorry. I had to get off the computer.I am trying to put up to Ch. 4 on there but it is messed up. Check for some more later. Adios
MC's Cousin
10:09 pm | February 29, 2004
Yup, too short. And now I finally get to find fault. First of all. Unless you are trying to slip this into your story and make it bigger than it now sounds, Doc. Halsey erased all of Cortana's memory of the Sergeant Johnson deal. Just incase you forgot. Of course, I could be mistaken. Secondly, the Gettysburg doesn't have any view port on the bridge, only view SCREENS. Other than those discepencies, it was pretty good. BUT, you are moving into territory that Bungie has rights to. Although, feel free to offer your opinion.

Signing Off


MCC
Nick Kang
9:47 pm | February 29, 2004
That was a good story. Although it was really short. And it didn't have much of a cliff hanger ending, and I don't think Sarge needs permission from the Chief to enter the bridge.
Anyway, great story, keep up the good work, just try to make it a bit longer.
Jon M
12:27 pm | February 29, 2004
Yea, maybe you were thinking paragraph one and paragraph two. j/k

Okay, good stuff for the most part.

Who is James? Or was that a slip and it's supposed to be John?

Other wise, what you really need to do is collapse these down into one chapter and finish that last part after the ellipse and have that also be part of the same chapter. This is pretty good, but too short to be two chapters.
Some Fan Fic Reader
8:21 pm | February 28, 2004
Those were two chapters? Written okay, but man it was short. Try making things a bit longer.


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