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Comments for 'The Mars Annihilations'



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2:47 pm | June 15, 2003
Maybe Mars Gravity contributed to the fall survivalness.... I haven't read this yet though, so this might not mean anything...
Forever Forerunner
4:19 pm | June 12, 2003
Well this was another outstanding piece of writing I have seen, more outstanding then my own! Good Starting, Good Ending.

Con: The Middle, not the Whole middle, but some parts could use some mechanics. Realistically I don't think the Chief could live only losing his shields from his crash into the building and the apperant falling into Hunters...

Overall Grade: Very good; 9/10
Wiley K.
3:59 pm | June 12, 2003
9.25/10. I don't think it is possible to hang from a Hunter's spines. In The Flood a Hunter effortlessley sheares a Marine and the Marine barley is touching the spines. Keep the story up, though. Good work man.
ThreadedAce3
2:49 am | June 12, 2003
I thought that this story was a good start. It used many descriptive details. You could go places, except you need to make it more realistic. From what I understood, the MC jumped from a building, then later on got shot by a fuel rod cannon? Although survival from that would be highly unlikely, i still enjoyed this story as a good read. Ill be looking out for your next chapter.
scope
1:21 am | June 12, 2003
9.5/10 Nice, lots of description too.


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