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Comments for 'The Ones He Left Behind: Prologue'



Tango709
6:45 pm | August 5, 2003
i posted here... whopee!
Fallen Heros
3:18 am | December 1, 2002
I guess if the worse part about my story is grammar im doing alright, thanks for the good comments guys!!! Expect part 1 around CHristmas.
Arch
2:57 am | December 1, 2002
I liked this one. However, you might wanna reread your future chapters to watch for grammatical errors. There were a lot of them. Missed commas and run-on sentences are a recurring nightmare in this story, so you might wanna watch out for 'em. However, you really came through on the storyline department, and i could easily follow where you led. Keep up the good work, man!
Sarge
11:32 pm | November 30, 2002
It is good but as you stated action is at a minimum keep it up.
Fallen Heros
9:33 pm | November 30, 2002
Btw its hopefully gonna be a book so action junkies probably wont take to liking it right away.
Fallen Heros
9:27 pm | November 30, 2002
Glad you liked it this is my first project I hope it is good? Did anyone else read it? I'd love some comments.
Neco Divad
6:09 pm | November 29, 2002
*clap clap clap* I loved this story. It was great, keep it up. Very nice adjective usage.


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