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Comments for 'The Croton Chronicles: Prologue' |
MC's Cousin
11:24 pm | February 29, 2004
It was better than I would have let it. I was uncalled for, but still. You have some work to do before you post again. Much more if you intend for us to read the whole darn thing.
Signing Off
MCC
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Berconius
10:52 pm | February 28, 2004
Punctuations...
That and the repeat paragraphs.
Your characters are also a wee bit thin.
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Jamirus99
7:18 pm | February 28, 2004
Yeah, some things were repeated, and a bit choppy, but let's see how the rest of the series fared....
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Sentinel
2:48 pm | February 28, 2004
It was sort of good. But there was so may paragraphs repeated that I slightly lost intrest. Good though.
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